crash


i survived the night

the world crashed in around me

crumpled and crying

on my four poster bed.

i felt the weight of it all

surround my body,

as my hands grabbed at the

iron bars,

cold and rough beneath my palms.

displaced by the human condition,

spaced too far from

the compass point,

trudging these bumpy trails –

downtrodden and trodden down,

i thought i’d had enough.

but i survived that night,

picked up the shards

lying underneath,

i pieced myself together

with the scraps of the world.

and though my eyes were dark

they saw the rising sun.

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8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jess
    May 23, 2011 @ 09:48:04

    such sadness and such hope of renewal, lovely

    Reply

  2. Jingle
    May 17, 2011 @ 15:17:02

    impressed,

    apt piece. 😉

    Reply

  3. goldenhairbear10
    May 16, 2011 @ 09:44:22

    Nice work.

    Reply

  4. Pareidoliac
    May 03, 2008 @ 23:01:41

    i pieced myself together

    with the scraps of the world.

    these lines are the most moving and inspiring… describing a movement that makes something of a breaking.

    Thank you!

    Reply

  5. James
    May 01, 2008 @ 10:28:59

    Wow, just wow. It seems we’re always trying to pull ourselves together, yet we never seem to reach completeness. Someday, lil’ sis, someday.

    Reply

  6. Wingbuilder
    May 01, 2008 @ 09:23:35

    As a whole I like this piece. The poem really took me to that dark space that we can all relate to. We always think of good will being something something universal and we neglect to bring up the emptiness that somehow inexplicably we all share.
    Technical Review: I think that while the term ‘Human Condition’ in the poem does technically fit the piece, it does now flow with the passion of the rest of the words that were chosen. Makes you step out of the flow for a moment for a side thought.

    Reply

  7. PacketRat
    May 01, 2008 @ 09:13:34

    Your a talented Panda..

    Reply

  8. willradik
    May 01, 2008 @ 09:12:42

    awww. : ( Sad.

    Reply

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